Monday, 22 September 2014

A2 LL - EXTRACT FROM A MENU COMMENTARY

Below is an example of an extract from a commentary written in class this afternoon. It addresses purpose directly and audience indirectly.

I tried to make the café attractive by using alliteration and assonance in the title 'Way Croft Café'. The vowel 'a' is repeated in 'Way' and 'Cafe', and the consonant ‘C’ is repeated in 'Croft' and 'Cafe'this is pleasing and satisfying for an audience. Both techniques are used to create emphasis in the name and make it appealing.
 
This example uses a clear assertion that identifies a clear purpose - 'I tried to make the café attractive'.
 
It uses quotations as evidence to support the assertion - 'Way Croft Café'.
 
It refers to analytical frameworks of phonology and grammar - 'alliteration' and 'assonance' as well as 'vowel' and 'consonant'.
 
It refers to audience indirectly with references to - 'emphasis' and 'feelings of satisfaction and pleasure'.
Now I realize I writing a commentary on my commentary. This is getting weird.