Below are a couple of paragraphs. The first is a straightforward analytical paragraph. I expect this would be placed in your commentary where you are analysing the article.
The second paragraph is an add on or extension paragraph and would appear after an analytical paragraph on text C.
ANALYTICAL PARAGRAPH
Kinnan – Rawlings is very passionate about food and cooking. One way she expresses this is where she describes in detail the exact parts of the vegetable she is going to use for a recipe. She does this in her first – autobiographical – recipe where she has decided to cook okra. She writes about ‘fresh okra’ and goes on, ‘I use only the young, crisp pods…’. Her passion is shown in her close attention to details. Her use of pre-modifies ‘fresh’, ‘young’ and ‘crisp’ are a way of expressing passion. She also uses the adverb ‘only’ as a way of emphasising the exclusive selection process. We feel the writer is strongly passionate about the cooking process from these techniques.
WITH COMPARATIVE ADDITION
Attention to detail is completely absent in the transcript of spontaneous speech. This is very different from text A in which attention to detail is dominant. For the husband, food is used as an illustration of how his grandmother has become absent minded as she gets older. The anecdote he tells his wife is an opportunity to laugh together at his grandmother’s absent mindedness. At the end of the transcript we read ‘oh yeah she’d left an apple pie in the oven…pie was lovely done really well by the time I got there’. This series of two declarative utterances show an appreciation of food but as consumers rather than cooks. And the informal register indicated by the colloquialism followed by the contraction, ‘oh yeah she’d’ both emphasise the informality of the discourse and the feeling of togetherness. The reference to food is used only to add to the humour of the interaction rather than being the main topic of discussion.
SOME COMPARATIVE TOPICS
Special food
Food from the past
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