Here are two paragraphs. Which one is descriptive and which one is description? Which of these two paragraphs is better than the other one?
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Heaney creates strong vivid pictures in his poetry. One way he creates strong visual images is by using the senses. In the poem Blackberry-Picking Heaney describes the blackberries, their
'...flesh was sweet
Like thickened wine: summer's blood was in it'
In this quote Heaney says the blackberries were very tasty and compares them to drinking wine. He makes the blackberries seem nice and attractive and alive.
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Heaney creates strong vivid pictures in his poetry. One way he creates strong visual images is by using the senses. In the poem Blackberry-Picking Heaney describes the blackberries, their
'...flesh was sweet
Like thickened wine: summer's blood was in it'
The noun 'sweet' makes the blackberries pleasing to taste. And references to 'flesh', and 'blood' gives us the impression of the blackberries being a living body or organism. 'Blood' is associated with the colour red with connotations of passion and lust. The metaphorical 'summer's blood' has connotations of vitality and energy.
