Postive points include:
- Some obvious features that address genre of a flyer
- headings and sub-headings were included
- references were made to the audience embedded within the text
Areas that need improvement:
- There were 15 main points in the source text
- 75% of the recast texts I marked contained less than 10 points from the source text
- 60% of the recast texts I've marked were significantly under 300 words
- Write in complete sentences.
- You must embed in your recast text straight forward, obvious, simple relevant, appropriate genre conventions
- It's conventional to refer to artists by their surnames. In this task, O'Keeffe is the appropriate term
- Focus on the whole extract.
- Only use what is clearly and explicitly present in the source text or strongly implied or clearly assumed by the source text
- The best way to structure your commentary is to write an introduction followed by a series of paragraphs under the topics audience, purpose and genre.
- Do not structure your commentary around a list of technical terms.
- Always identify language features imbedded within quotations
- In your commentary never just list different language features and identify basic functions.
- It is vital that you quote, identify language features and comment on these within the context of the sentence, paragraph and or recast text as a whole.
