Below is a number of feedback points from answers to the following question:
Question 2
Read the source material which follows and answer both questions:
Text A is from an article entitled [Mountainside of Hell] by [Julie Flint]
It was first published in the [The Observer]
Read from 'Despite the cold and the hunger...' on page 40 to the end of the article on page 41.
You are [are working for an aid agency and have been asked to write a leaflet raising awareness of the plight of these Iraqi Kurds]
Using the source material, write the [text of the leaflet.]
Your audience [are the general public]
You should adapt the source material, using your own words as far as possible.
Your [leaflet] should be approximately 300 – 400 words in length.
In your adaptation you should:
• use language appropriately to address purpose and audience
• write accurately and coherently, applying relevant ideas and concepts.
(25 marks)
AND
Question 3
Write a commentary which explains the choices you made when writing your [leaflet]
commenting on the following:
• how language and form have been used to suit audience and purpose
• how vocabulary and other stylistic features have been used to shape meaning and
achieve particular effects.
You should aim to write about 150 – 250 words in this commentary.
(15 marks)
Question 2
Read the source material which follows and answer both questions:
Text A is from an article entitled [Mountainside of Hell] by [Julie Flint]
It was first published in the [The Observer]
Read from 'Despite the cold and the hunger...' on page 40 to the end of the article on page 41.
You are [are working for an aid agency and have been asked to write a leaflet raising awareness of the plight of these Iraqi Kurds]
Using the source material, write the [text of the leaflet.]
Your audience [are the general public]
You should adapt the source material, using your own words as far as possible.
Your [leaflet] should be approximately 300 – 400 words in length.
In your adaptation you should:
• use language appropriately to address purpose and audience
• write accurately and coherently, applying relevant ideas and concepts.
(25 marks)
AND
Question 3
Write a commentary which explains the choices you made when writing your [leaflet]
commenting on the following:
• how language and form have been used to suit audience and purpose
• how vocabulary and other stylistic features have been used to shape meaning and
achieve particular effects.
You should aim to write about 150 – 250 words in this commentary.
(15 marks)
Feedback points
- Most of your recast text must be drawn from specific details from the source text.
- Focussing your attention on the genre conventions is irrelevant and there are no marks available for over using genre conventions at the expense of detailed recast points from the actual text.
- I strongly recommend that you begin paragraphs by making statements about audience, purpose or genre.
- Avoid making your opening paragraph sentence identifying language features. This leads to feature spotting and distorts your commentary so that you do not answer the question.
- Make sure the exam marker knows you have written a leaflet. do this by using provocative titles and sub headings, call your audience to take specific and detailed action.
- The extract can be split into two sections: physical problems and relations with the Turks. As a result this structure and content MUST inform your leaflet. I'd expect you to refer to the breakdown in relations between the soldiers and refugees. I'd also expect you to call on volunteers from your audience to go out to help the refugees in this crisis. As one way of responding to this difficult relationship.
- To get the top marks for this question you must thoroughly engage with the task and adopt an angle - a particular way of approaching or considering an issue or problem.
- You must assume a perspective, a way of looking at the crisis. point of view, viewpoint, standpoint, position, side, aspect, slant, direction, approach, outlook, light.
