AS ENGLISH LANGUAGE AND LITERATURE
ELLA 1 INTEGRATED ANALYSIS AND TEXT PRODUCTION
STREETCAR NAMED DESIRE – FEEDBACK ON CONFLICT ESSAY
Below are a few feedback points to consider for the next essay type question you answer for this unit of the course.
- Only 13 out of 21 students handed this assignment in to me. The single most important factor of students improving their grades and getting a good AS result is practise at writing exam style questions. Unless you do the work set you are stopping yourself from doing well in this subject.
· In your comments on a quotation you must identify language features and the effects on the audience
· Use shorter simpler sentences in your answers.
· Many of you need to consider each point in more specific detail
· It is vital that you must be concise in your writing
· Always use a formal academic register in your essays. You must avoid the use of clichés, hackneyed expressions and metaphorical language
· It’s important to plan very carefully what you are going to write before you write it. Be focused, specific, detailed and absolutely relevant to the essay question.
What Next
Below I’ve copied out a paragraph taken from a student from this class. There are some expression problems with this paragraph. However it is still a good example of what you all need to be aiming at.
Read the paragraph and consider what makes it effective?
Also what are the problems with expression?
“The spoken language also comes into contention on several occasions. Stanley has a very harsh, straight way of talking and says utterances such as ‘let’s cut the rebok’ when he becomes frustrated. ‘Rebok’ is a colloquialism that we would never hear in Blanche’s vocabulary. It is also a very blunt way of it – he probably couldn’t of put across what he wanted to say in fewer words. On the contrary, Blanche embellishes her language with metaphorical and poetic phrases to shy away from revealing the truth such as ‘soft people have to shimmer and glow’. She also demonstrates quite an intellectual vocabulary using words such as ‘improvident’ which greatly contrasts with Stanley’s use of rather simple and informal word choices such as ‘God honey, it’s gonna be sweet’
